Umaril
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Post by Umaril on Feb 16, 2007 16:59:38 GMT -5
Only a small few spelling errors. You should post the world this is in in the writers prewrite central - to give us an idea about the setting of the story. Also, when you changed the location after the second paragraph, you should put stars like this:
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or like this:
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You get what I mean? Because people won't know where you are in the story otherwise.
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Raistlin
Beginner
I'm tired.
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Post by Raistlin on Feb 16, 2007 16:59:52 GMT -5
I'm liking it so far.
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Post by mogon on Feb 16, 2007 20:09:10 GMT -5
not alot of readers..
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Decline of Rome
Beginner
A fool can use a proverb as well as a cripple man can use his legs.[M:0]
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Post by Decline of Rome on Feb 16, 2007 20:20:47 GMT -5
Good beginning. I'm interested.
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Post by Khornate Marksman on Feb 17, 2007 16:04:29 GMT -5
I don't anything about Warcraft, but this is good so far. Good job ;D
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Post by mogon on Feb 20, 2007 14:17:15 GMT -5
Thanks, I am in school right now and will get to writting.
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Post by mogon on Feb 20, 2007 14:18:58 GMT -5
In school that is.
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