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Post by DEATH97 on Oct 5, 2006 3:11:45 GMT -5
[glow=red,2,300]he awakens from his slumber, the dusk begins his day...
Once again he starts to hunger, and goes searching for his prey...
The village lies beneath him, and they can try with all their might..
But even if they run, they can't escape this hunters sight...
He enters town unnoticed, the darkness as his shield...
How many times he's done this, how many times he's killed...
A single house he enters, a man and woman lay asleep...
he feels the satisfaction, of imagining how he'll weep...
Her blood is sweet as honey, he drains her of her best...
Then just because he can, he drains her of the rest...
He leaves the corpse behind him, his task tonight is done...
He's fulfilled his lust for hunger, he's fulfilled his want for fun...
But outside he is surprised, for the villagers there, do wait...
They've gathered there in Numbers, just to seal his fate...
He struggles for survival, but the town will have their say...
They string him up till sunrise, at last they'll make him pay...
Engulfed in flames he vanishes, his deeds condemn his soul...
But there is one they've forgotten, that will not let his brother go..
I've heard what they've done dear brother, I've felt your soul take flight...
Now the village will run red with blood, for I awaken...... Tonight.[/glow]
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Oct 5, 2006 5:59:41 GMT -5
hey this is really really good. I just have one suggestion.
But even if they run, they can't escape this hunters sight... you should change it to his sight.
but its your baby I'm just making suggestions. Overall tho its really good. hell its amazing.
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Post by DEATH97 on Oct 5, 2006 13:04:24 GMT -5
I would, but hunters sight refers to the stage one vampire ability in Oblivion.. its called hunters sight.
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Post by Dagothkitty on Oct 5, 2006 17:57:28 GMT -5
Wow, that was awesome dude. Great job!
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Post by DEATH97 on Oct 5, 2006 18:07:38 GMT -5
Thanks
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Post by Maliku on Oct 6, 2006 19:54:04 GMT -5
I liked it a lot.
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Post by DEATH97 on Oct 6, 2006 20:22:33 GMT -5
Thanks, thought it up as I was posting it.
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Post by Maliku on Oct 6, 2006 22:16:18 GMT -5
It's nice to see a vampire's perspective. I think someone should make a vampire story.
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Post by Raistlin on Oct 18, 2006 16:00:04 GMT -5
why don't you?
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Post by Dagothkitty on Oct 18, 2006 17:53:52 GMT -5
he doesn like to write. I think he will eventually though......
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Post by saleenstang on Oct 27, 2006 20:49:29 GMT -5
that was really good that was probably the best poem ive heard thats not made by a real professional poet. would you mind if i tried to make a vampire story based on your poem? i probably wont finish im not that great but its a really good idea
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Post by Dagothkitty on Oct 27, 2006 20:51:04 GMT -5
he probably wouldnt mind, cause death is sweet kike that, but hes on and will answer
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Post by saleenstang on Oct 27, 2006 20:53:23 GMT -5
Dagoth nice avatar =D
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Post by Dagothkitty on Oct 27, 2006 20:55:23 GMT -5
thnx ;D
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Post by DEATH97 on Oct 27, 2006 22:54:25 GMT -5
Thanks for the compliments, and as far as making a story based on it.. .sure knock yourself out! just say somewhere that my poem inspired it.. cause that would be cool
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