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LVD
Dec 24, 2006 1:17:19 GMT -5
Post by OGRenderence on Dec 24, 2006 1:17:19 GMT -5
I ain't listening to you.
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LVD
Dec 24, 2006 3:09:36 GMT -5
Post by OGRenderence on Dec 24, 2006 3:09:36 GMT -5
Ahh yes. You have givin no wise advice.
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Raistlin
Beginner
I'm tired.
Posts: 2,451
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LVD
Dec 24, 2006 8:22:42 GMT -5
Post by Raistlin on Dec 24, 2006 8:22:42 GMT -5
guys, don't start fighting...
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LVD
Dec 24, 2006 10:16:01 GMT -5
Post by OGRenderence on Dec 24, 2006 10:16:01 GMT -5
I'm not =P
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LVD
Dec 24, 2006 10:21:59 GMT -5
Post by Inquisitor Loki on Dec 24, 2006 10:21:59 GMT -5
Ah. Why would that be? Turning away wise advice just because it offends you is rather...foolhardy. All you did was act like you are better than him.
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LVD
Dec 24, 2006 22:25:26 GMT -5
Post by OGRenderence on Dec 24, 2006 22:25:26 GMT -5
You were acting better there to. (As says Loki. You NEVER argue with Loki)
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LVD
Dec 24, 2006 23:05:59 GMT -5
Post by Inquisitor Loki on Dec 24, 2006 23:05:59 GMT -5
Are you joking? I pointed out a few errors in his Teaser, and he flips out and claims I'm insulting him, despite that I'm trying to help him! So just because I don't fall on my face and say that he's the best damn writer to walk the Earth, I'm acting better than him? ... What the ****? Just the tone of the first post really pissed me off, and that is pretty damn hard. I know you were trying to help but I would just walk away from this one Karn isn't very forgiving if you keep fighting about it and if it got me mad it must have really pissed off Karn.
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LVD
Dec 24, 2006 23:32:02 GMT -5
Post by me on Dec 24, 2006 23:32:02 GMT -5
So any comments about the actual story??? I liked it especially the poen at the beginning. It reminds me of another writer who thouroghly outclasses me
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LVD
Dec 25, 2006 0:04:19 GMT -5
Post by OGRenderence on Dec 25, 2006 0:04:19 GMT -5
Are you joking? I pointed out a few errors in his Teaser, and he flips out and claims I'm insulting him, despite that I'm trying to help him! So just because I don't fall on my face and say that he's the best damn writer to walk the Earth, I'm acting better than him? ... What the ****? Just the tone of the first post really pissed me off, and that is pretty damn hard. I know you were trying to help but I would just walk away from this one Karn isn't very forgiving if you keep fighting about it and if it got me mad it must have really pissed off Karn. I'm getting better at being friendlier, but if I feel threatened I'll let you all know.
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LVD
Dec 25, 2006 0:18:34 GMT -5
Post by OGRenderence on Dec 25, 2006 0:18:34 GMT -5
Lay your head upon the Snows And feel Their icy grip! The Snow of beconing Death Show up more and more! Battalions march forward to meet this elusive foe! Only to die Like many before! Do not fight Their mighty grip Just let your soul take the Slip!
Borg looked at these words and mused about the last two lines. These were a great mystery to all, even the scholars. Why would only the last two lines rhyme? He pushed the thought from his mind as he pulled the book from the frozen table. He looked down at the book's late owner. The poor bastard had frozen nearly instantly, as so had felt almost no pain. Borg looked away and checked his oxygen packs. Still full was a good sign, while empty was a sure sign of a man's up coming Death. He kicked the door back open and walked out into the destroyed Battalion School.
Jof looked at Borg as he joined the rest of the salvagers. "Where you been?" Jof said over the crackling radio. "I were lookin fer survivors." Jof rolled his eyes and went back to writing in his Log Book.
Blood will freeze on an open field One who is wounded you cannot heal! Life of the Gods will not be given to any man shot on the Frozen Plain!
Jof looked at the words he always saw on the front of his Log, and he thought. "What would happen if the North would melt.....?"
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LVD
Dec 25, 2006 1:41:43 GMT -5
Post by me on Dec 25, 2006 1:41:43 GMT -5
Poems make for a good beginning to a chapter or part...but they lose their special quality if overused That being said they havent grown old yet so I consider this a great update
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LVD
Dec 25, 2006 8:38:45 GMT -5
Post by OGRenderence on Dec 25, 2006 8:38:45 GMT -5
*Stops having heart attack* Ok. I was actually just writing down random small sentences to make these poems.
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LVD
Dec 25, 2006 15:03:54 GMT -5
Post by me on Dec 25, 2006 15:03:54 GMT -5
LOL THAT IS AWESOME LOL
That actually is hecka funny.
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LVD
Dec 29, 2006 3:06:14 GMT -5
Post by uesugi on Dec 29, 2006 3:06:14 GMT -5
From what was posted, I think this can be a great story... But I want more Theif's Tale! *cries*
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LVD
Jan 9, 2007 19:18:31 GMT -5
Post by OGRenderence on Jan 9, 2007 19:18:31 GMT -5
Quit whinning and complain on Theif.
*Working on next part*
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