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Post by knightslayer on Jan 20, 2007 23:35:52 GMT -5
Chapter 1: Intro
This story begins with a young samurai named Genkura. He was 14 years old and lived by the center of Japan.He lived in a small urban town where peaceful country folk harvest crops and take care of their animals. Little kids would always run around and play and laugh. You would also see The older folk playing GO on a table next to a shady tree. Genkuras town was nothing special until it became one of the most hectic towns in the world. This is his story.
Soooooo what do u think so far? this is my first story on this site.
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Post by Maliku on Jan 21, 2007 0:30:15 GMT -5
You automatically get points from me for liking Bleach.
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Post by Abaddon on Jan 21, 2007 1:27:06 GMT -5
I sense the following
1. A bunch of evil dudes kill people
2. Said main character goes on a journey avenge said village
3. There will be ninjas, samurai and people jumping 40 feet off the ground.
4. There will be a female villian or heroin.
I'll read, just because I throughly enjoy samurai stories.
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Post by me on Jan 21, 2007 2:36:40 GMT -5
Wasn't much there to go off of...but I like swords...and slicing.
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Post by uesugi on Jan 21, 2007 3:06:24 GMT -5
Spelling, grammar, etc. And Go doesn't have a capital 'O' in it. Otherwise... Keep it coming.
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Post by me on Jan 21, 2007 3:11:55 GMT -5
Grammar Punctuation Spelling Yay that works
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Jan 21, 2007 9:08:10 GMT -5
Umm well for one thing samurais weren't in china. They were in japan. And I think Go was also in Japan. Other than that I'll still read it cause I like swords. I have 7 myself.
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Post by me on Jan 21, 2007 13:26:01 GMT -5
Go is just a general asian game....believe me.
And about the samurai thing...couldn't it possibly be a tale of several samurai who immigrated to China?
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Jan 21, 2007 13:57:47 GMT -5
why would they imagrate to china? And then they wouldn't be samurais any more lol. This story is full of contradictions. But whatever it doesnt matter it could be an alternate time line.
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Post by Dagothkitty on Jan 21, 2007 14:13:15 GMT -5
It was really short, but has promise for a first story. Yeah, I think the samurai were in Japan. So, your not out of luck. Just click this button - on your post and change it, and make 'intill', 'until'. Otherwise, Keep it going.
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Post by uesugi on Jan 21, 2007 14:22:10 GMT -5
Some Samurai may have immigrated, as China's sword ban was later than Japan's, IIRC. And, Dagoth, he never said it was going to be historically accurate.
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Post by Dagothkitty on Jan 21, 2007 14:24:09 GMT -5
Thats Jordan.... I bet this is influenced by Red Steel. That's like all he talks about. ;D
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Post by knightslayer on Jan 21, 2007 16:03:30 GMT -5
actually its not based on red steel. and its short because its just a tiny little intro. but i like how u guys are giving me ideas and talking about my story. it helps. And i modified it so it says japan and until. i got to get off the computer but ill be back to write more. ;D
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Post by Dagothkitty on Jan 21, 2007 19:48:42 GMT -5
Ok awesome.
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Post by knightslayer on Jan 25, 2007 10:27:37 GMT -5
Chapter2:Genkura
Genkura awoke from a deep sleep with bags under his eyes from working so much and stayin up late. His mother is very sick so Genkura has to do alot of the work. Genkuras dad works pretty much the whole day so Genkura stays home most of the day taking care of his mom. Genkura is 14 years old with spikey dark blue hair. hes 5'3 and likes swords and to train. Genkura got dressed and checked up on his mom to make sure she was doing good. He made some breakfast for his mom and himself. He went in his room and grabbes his bamboo sword for training. "Man I wish i had a real sword"he said to himself. He walked out side and headed toward the training academy. He opened the double doors and saw everyone just talking to their freinds and waiting for the sensei to come. He looked down at the floor and saw his friend tokolan just sitting on the ground sleeping. So he snuck up and hit him on the head really hard with his bamboo sword. "Owww why the hell did you do that" Genkura just sat there and laughed. suddenly the door swung opened and nokomai walked in the door. "ok today is fighting day! "oh crap everyone shouted! "alright the first match is Genkura versus Mukari!
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