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Post by Dagothkitty on Apr 1, 2007 18:53:16 GMT -5
There are some minor flaws, such as missing punctuation and some mispells. It's not bad, but I think that these flashbacks can be inplemented into the story. Like, maybe the character sees somethings. Maybe when He is out on the street, he sees a man... er... raping a girl. Maybe this triggers a flashback. Like Uesugi said, imply the characteristics into the story, without just flat out saying them. Remember, use storng verbs and adjectives. Describe the senses, and what the charcter is feeling.
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