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Post by dogonda on Oct 11, 2006 19:16:35 GMT -5
LOLZ EMO, its pretty good, Drop the rhyming... Make a hiku, make yourself seem sophisticated.
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Post by Khornate Marksman on Oct 11, 2006 19:23:28 GMT -5
ok dude i'm not a F**CKING EMO!!! Sry bout that. I was thinking of doing a haiku, but I thought the rhyming would make it flow a little better. I'll try a haiku.
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Oct 11, 2006 20:12:29 GMT -5
ok its a bit corny and would never work at "whooing" her but its good none the less. But really buddy just talk to her. You don't want her think you stalk her or something and poetry is really just for the sappy couples not for the lonely guy sitting in the back of class staring at some girl. Trust me wait till your going out with her than say you wrote this for her.
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Post by DEATH97 on Oct 11, 2006 22:01:01 GMT -5
I'm afraid I agree with wolf (theres a shocker) its corny. Not too bad, but I don't think you should use that to approach this girl. Poems work wonders, but they need to be more personal. surprise her. talk to her, get to know alittle about her. Pay attention to a girl. The minor things she mentions just out of chance, can sweep her off her feet, once she realizes someone cared enough to pay attention. Still you don't want to come off as some sicko stalker. Would be weird to get this from a complete stranger. while your getting to know her, make sure she gets to know you too. Hell if you accomplish that, you may not even need the poem. Dr Death signing off
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Post by Khornate Marksman on Oct 12, 2006 19:49:59 GMT -5
Alright. Well thanks you guys. *Kicks Bloodmoonwolf in ass with steel-toed boots*. I have been getting to know her a little. Usually when I look in her direction I see her staring back at me and she quickly turns her head. I know she's not staring at the guy next to me cuz he's a total nerd. I'm ok at poems. Just not romantic ones.
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Oct 12, 2006 20:07:51 GMT -5
hey what did I do? I gave an honest response
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Post by Khornate Marksman on Oct 12, 2006 20:28:35 GMT -5
I don't know. *kicks everyone else in crotch* There I kicked everone else. Happy? lol
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Oct 12, 2006 20:29:31 GMT -5
yes yes I am. Have you read my stories yet? XD
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Post by Khornate Marksman on Oct 12, 2006 20:50:04 GMT -5
yeah, great work. I wrote a little more in The Plague
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Oct 13, 2006 5:59:06 GMT -5
cool I haven't had much of a chance to read many stories. I will read your tho. Damn I need like a schedule or somthing for this. lol
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Post by Maliku on Oct 13, 2006 22:27:15 GMT -5
*kicks Hound in the crotch* That's what you get for kicking me.
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