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Post by Dagothkitty on Aug 27, 2007 19:43:51 GMT -5
I wrote this up today. Not fond of it... though you may like it. *shrugs*
Ominous signs, Appear everywhere, Since the beginning of time And yet we try to forget them. They call out their warnings, Their voice is so loud, Yet we try to ignore them, Our heads in the clouds. Long have they painstakingly watched, And have done nothing, But we lose ourselves in the process And then they smile upon us. Ambition and greed, Drives us to power. And with this terrible power, We become what we have feared our whole lives. Empty promises, false encouragement, Is taking us down the drain to darkness. Arrogance spreads like a plague over us, And the prophecies we thought impossible are reality. But who is to blame? We all turn to someone, Yet we never really know what to say. We look for a hero, One to show us the way, But they never come… And then we realize what fools we were, That our tongues were twisted and our soul too dark, And we are forgotten, time continues it’s course, No matter how treacherous it may be.
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Post by Uesugi on Aug 27, 2007 19:45:23 GMT -5
The flow seemed a bit broken, but ti was otherwise decent. Good work Dagoth...
SUPERB! AWESOME! MOUTH-WIDE OPEN!
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~Chieftain of the Dúnedain~
Intermediate
'Lord of the Rangers.'
I es Bellum Dominatio, I servo tantum pro honor,truth, and victoria![M:0]
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Post by ~Chieftain of the Dúnedain~ on Aug 27, 2007 21:04:32 GMT -5
Agreed the flow is a bit rough. Rather good though. Kudos for Dagoth
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Post by me on Aug 27, 2007 21:15:28 GMT -5
Since you are undoubtedly tired of hearing about the flow, I think I'll look at something else. You had superb word choice with this poem Dagoth, and pnce you get the flow down (D'oh!) you'll be a good poet!
AWESOME!
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Post by Dagothkitty on Aug 27, 2007 21:26:27 GMT -5
Ah yes, ofcourse.... the flow......
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>_>
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Post by lanaia74 on Sept 2, 2007 5:03:28 GMT -5
The enotion and depth of this piece makes up for the flow! Brilliant!
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