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Post by Disaster <3 on Apr 14, 2007 16:19:31 GMT -5
Last Good-Bye
When all hope was lost, I called out your name. You said you’d always be there But you never came.
I suffered alone With no hand to hold. Nothing could help For the world had turned cold.
I tried to forget you But my heart had to persist. My mind finally succumbed; It couldn’t resist.
Then the news came Unceasing were the tears Totaled was the car, Gone the one I held dear.
I went to the church And saw your drawn face. I knew in the casket Was really not your place.
She was there too, My replacement. She spoke about you Spoke of the event.
Some drunk ran the light As you drove past. Hit you side-on, Making that breath your last.
I wept even harder This was too much to bear Why did it have to be you? Life just wasn’t fair.
When none were watching, I stole up to your shell Gave it a quick kiss And wished all to be well.
Though all hope was lost, I’ll call out your name. You said you’d always be there And this time you came. Okay, basically this is about an ex-girlfriend thinking about her ex-boyfriend, no matter how hard she tries not to. She hears from some source that the boyfriend was killed in an accident, and the rest is for your imagination to think about
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Post by me on Apr 14, 2007 16:21:57 GMT -5
Nice poem...and after seeing that your female I must ask....out of curiosity....eh never mind
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Post by Disaster <3 on Apr 14, 2007 16:27:14 GMT -5
were you going to ask if that happened to me? If that was your question, then no it hasn't. I was jsut feeling... that one feeling. I write mostly out of what I'm afraid of, or dragons... or both in the same piece.
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Post by me on Apr 14, 2007 16:28:02 GMT -5
lol ok, just checkin!
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Post by Dagothkitty on Apr 14, 2007 16:28:15 GMT -5
Good poem again.
Had = Hand
Second Paragraph.
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Post by Disaster <3 on Apr 14, 2007 16:33:49 GMT -5
Thank you for catching that!
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Post by Dagothkitty on Apr 14, 2007 16:38:48 GMT -5
No problem.
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Raistlin
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Post by Raistlin on Apr 14, 2007 19:38:01 GMT -5
I'm not one for poems, but that was pretty good.
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Post by Disaster <3 on Apr 15, 2007 19:40:50 GMT -5
Thanks, Raist. ^^ I hope it wins the contest, but I don't think it will. :/
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Post by me on Apr 15, 2007 19:43:34 GMT -5
Contest?
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Post by Disaster <3 on Apr 15, 2007 19:45:24 GMT -5
Yeah. My website has contsests all the time, and I entered this one. I should've put in Dragon's Play, it was better.
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Post by me on Apr 15, 2007 19:46:29 GMT -5
This is still pretty good. Plus the emotional involvement will help you alot!
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Post by Disaster <3 on Apr 15, 2007 19:46:46 GMT -5
woo hoo!
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Post by me on Apr 15, 2007 19:48:01 GMT -5
Yeppers 'tis a thing to be glad about.
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Post by Disaster <3 on Apr 15, 2007 19:49:50 GMT -5
'Course, I kinda wish the judge was someone different... She's liable to pick based on who she knows, not on poetic quality like I did... The system is: Winner is the next contest's judge, who picks the next winner who becomes the next judge, and so on.
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