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Fallen
Jun 14, 2007 17:30:47 GMT -5
Post by BloodMoonWolf on Jun 14, 2007 17:30:47 GMT -5
Well this is my new poem. Tell me what you think I fell it came out well. It wasn't their fault. They meant only good. Our intentions tho pure were masked by our hate. So many have suffered. So many have died How could it happen? Why is this i so?
The corpses are many. The suffering emance. The blood has been spilled. The graves have been dug. This time is of mourning one hellish event
Why couldn't I stop it? It all has gone wrong. It's all been my fault I should have tried harder They are all gone. Our saviors have fallen.
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Fallen
Jun 14, 2007 23:16:24 GMT -5
Post by me on Jun 14, 2007 23:16:24 GMT -5
You misspelled immmense...otherwise good!
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Fallen
Jun 15, 2007 5:08:43 GMT -5
Post by lanaia74 on Jun 15, 2007 5:08:43 GMT -5
VERY well done!
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Fallen
Jun 15, 2007 5:43:02 GMT -5
Post by BloodMoonWolf on Jun 15, 2007 5:43:02 GMT -5
SHUT UP ME!! lol but thanks both of you
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Fallen
Jun 16, 2007 0:16:58 GMT -5
Post by Disaster <3 on Jun 16, 2007 0:16:58 GMT -5
Me, you misspelled immense too... Very nice, Blood. I love it. Nice word choice.
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Fallen
Jun 16, 2007 7:47:30 GMT -5
Post by BloodMoonWolf on Jun 16, 2007 7:47:30 GMT -5
lol wow she totally zinged ya me! lol thank you furle XD
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Fallen
Jun 16, 2007 19:51:56 GMT -5
Post by me on Jun 16, 2007 19:51:56 GMT -5
Excellent observance of a rebuke and follow up one liner sir!
+1 Zing!
And I blame public schools!
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