etherealshadow
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the impossible is often whats never been tried
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fly
Jul 31, 2007 3:17:25 GMT -5
Post by etherealshadow on Jul 31, 2007 3:17:25 GMT -5
the once light and full of flight,
tainted with darkness,
has lost her wings
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fly
Jul 31, 2007 3:20:58 GMT -5
Post by me on Jul 31, 2007 3:20:58 GMT -5
Short and confusing...Capitalize the first word...
But it is also short and sweet....Methinks that there could be another verse though...can't help but feel that its missing something.
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fly
Jul 31, 2007 11:46:10 GMT -5
Post by Uesugi on Jul 31, 2007 11:46:10 GMT -5
I like it. Short, memorable... Hmm, though I can't help but think we're missing something on the whole. Is this poem about a fly? Well, either way, certainly memorable.
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