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Post by me on Aug 10, 2007 6:18:28 GMT -5
Another made in a minute poem
Where doth do your children lie On foreign battlefield far and wide Cold through secrecy and deceit Torn asunder by those we can't see On land with blood imbibed
Bring forth your hounds of war our children of night shall meet them Send forth your tanks of might Our soldiers and Ghost shall greet them In lands where only red thrives
All your might shall not stop them All your people shall cower Our children of night cannot be beaten Except by the Ghost who fights. In the lands where blood never dies
We have deceived you Our conceit surrounds you A chain that cannot be broken Not even by the black of night All where the red blood lies
This is the land of lies Where Day dare not go Where night never dies Who will be the one to save you Who will be the one who dies
No longer shall you rise from the fire No longer shall your ashes a safe haven provide Against us there is no surviving Even the Phoenix shall die All where the red sun rise.
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Post by Uesugi on Aug 10, 2007 12:32:56 GMT -5
So, does this ultimately spoil Blackest Night and Red Dawn and whatever comes after for us <_<
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Post by me on Aug 10, 2007 12:39:35 GMT -5
Perhaps its a deceitful spoiler.
No. It doesn't.
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Post by lanaia74 on Aug 11, 2007 5:11:35 GMT -5
WOW! Mouth wide open! Speechless!
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Post by DEATH97 on Aug 12, 2007 15:10:06 GMT -5
Its very good (Me). It seems to be a mixture of different styles, which throws me off when I read them. It seems to rhyme at times intentionally, but then goes off into a deeper version of itself. I like the they rhyming poems and the word driven, but together they make me pause and lose the flow of what I'm reading.
This is just my own personal preference however, so its not really anything thats wrong with it. The content itself I enjoyed very much.
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Post by me on Aug 12, 2007 15:11:48 GMT -5
Heh, a radical ground breaking mixture of styles it is not then, well, at least the wording was somewhat good. Thanks for the comment
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