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Post by Abaddon on Oct 29, 2006 12:59:57 GMT -5
okay warrior it is.
After his mead.Durtz {I'll call him Durtz from now on} wandered around the Imperial city. He passed shops and houses until he found who he was looking for. He walked into Slash n Smash and he hello to his brother,Urbul-gro-Malog They embraced quickly and awkwardly.
"How are things?" he said Durtz
Urbul said " I have joined the theives guild." Behind Durtz, the door flew off its hinges and nearly hit him.
A man in dark armor walked in. A shortsword at his hip and arrows in a quiver on his back.
Without a word
He drew his sword and placed at Urbul's neck.
What do you do?
A} try to save his brother B}Run C}Switch to assassin's point of view D}Switch to theive's POV
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Post by Dagothkitty on Oct 29, 2006 13:13:45 GMT -5
switch point of views? ..... i wouldnt do that at the monet. A then, and there was a few punctuation errors, other then that, it was ok. You should add the enviroment, like when Durtz was walking to slash'n' smash, you could have described the city, using the sense, taste, touch, hear, see, and so froth. Its a good start however, and i appreciate that you actuallt get on, as others join and never get back on. *exalts*
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Post by DEATH97 on Oct 30, 2006 0:26:55 GMT -5
A
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Post by me on Oct 30, 2006 0:29:15 GMT -5
A=my vote...and ya POV changes dont really work unless you get to the end of a situation/chapter
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Post by OGRenderence on Oct 30, 2006 7:08:07 GMT -5
A.
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Post by Abaddon on Oct 30, 2006 23:05:10 GMT -5
Thinking quickly Durtz grabbed a nearby longsword. He swung into the assassin's skull. The assassin muttered a few words and Durtz was frozen to his postion, the longsword centmeters from the assassin's brow. Durtz could only watch helplessly as his brother looked like a mouse before the open maw of a mountain lion. He never stood a chance. The assassin flipped backward, cocked an arrow and let it fly.The arrow pierced Urbul's throat.
Durtz tapped into his inner self and felt that energy. He felt stronger and tougher. Mostly, He felt bloodlust.He looked at the assassin and threw the longsword at him. The assassin,quick as lightning,drew his weapon and deflected it. His sword cracked and shattered. He turned on his heel and ran.
What do you do? A:follow him B:Stay with brother C:Quench your bloodlust with someone else d:Drink mead to calm your nerves
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Post by DEATH97 on Oct 31, 2006 8:53:17 GMT -5
B
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Post by Dagothkitty on Oct 31, 2006 11:33:38 GMT -5
C
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Post by me on Nov 1, 2006 20:32:22 GMT -5
c
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Post by Abaddon on Nov 6, 2006 18:30:15 GMT -5
VOTEVOTEVOTE! ;D ;D
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Post by dogonda on Nov 6, 2006 22:35:24 GMT -5
c
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Post by Abaddon on Nov 6, 2006 22:56:17 GMT -5
Knowing the assassin was too fast.Durtz picked up a iron mace and ran outside.
He saw a old redguard in blue mages robes and a nervous breton pilgrim.
A}Kill that old wrench, she won't be living much longer anyway.
B}Kill that breton worshipper, show Malacath your power!
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Post by Maliku on Nov 6, 2006 22:59:21 GMT -5
B Haha, sorry for saying C. What was that about sheesh, I must be losing my mind.
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Post by Abaddon on Nov 6, 2006 23:03:56 GMT -5
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Post by me on Nov 6, 2006 23:11:35 GMT -5
B then A B Then A BThen A B then A B then A B then A B Then A B Then A B Then A
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