|
Post by dansanman on Nov 4, 2006 13:36:20 GMT -5
Elorn stopped as he anxiously peered into the jagged square opening in cave that stood in front of him. He could not understand why he felt such dread, he had not felt such terror sinse he saw his dark elf mother was bludgeoned to death by a dread zombie that had wondered into town that horrible day. Elorn hesitated for a slip second before he ventured into the sinister cave.
The cave was dark, damp, and dreary, but apparently void of any life. Elorn’s terror subsided a little, but not much, “Why would Master summon me here …, its empty and looks to have been that way for many weeks…” Elorn muttered under his breath as he scanned the dark cavern to see if he missed any sign of resent activity.
Silently a shadowy cloaked figure emerged from the swirling shadows at the back of the fissure and noiselessly approached Enlorn, “Ah, at last my faith servant has come for his… promotion.,” whispered the cloaked figure, “Macrovel, it is an honor to see you again, and yes, I am ready for my promotion.” Enlorn reported.
“Yes well, it has come to my attention from our Dark Brotherhood allies that you….are the son of particular dark elf woman, who I was, employed to kill and also, her little son,” whispered Macrovel as Elorn stumbled backward in shock. “It is time to promote you to my undead servant, to damn in the twisted dance of death until you rip apart as I command you!” he exclaimed.
|
|
|
Post by dansanman on Nov 4, 2006 14:05:27 GMT -5
hmm...
|
|
|
Post by fallingfar on Nov 4, 2006 17:52:27 GMT -5
[ This message has been removed at the request of I don't give a **** ]
|
|
|
Post by dansanman on Nov 4, 2006 18:09:45 GMT -5
mk, all fixed
|
|
|
Post by dogonda on Nov 4, 2006 19:35:30 GMT -5
Why would Master me here…,
You need a verb like. Why would the master request me to be here.
|
|
|
Post by dansanman on Nov 4, 2006 19:47:47 GMT -5
yea, i know, i just didn't feel like using the thesaurus that conveniently next to me....and you smite me?!
|
|
|
Post by Maliku on Nov 4, 2006 21:00:29 GMT -5
It has the beginnings of a good story.
|
|
|
Post by DEATH97 on Nov 7, 2006 10:56:02 GMT -5
Not a bad start, but there are alot of spelling errors for such a small post. Still I agree with Maliku
|
|
|
Post by Dagothkitty on Nov 10, 2006 17:57:15 GMT -5
yes. Im a little confused. Is the master trying to kill elorn?
|
|