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Post by Inquisitor Loki on Oct 7, 2006 20:27:52 GMT -5
Bullets blazed past Zan’s ears like angry wasps that where hungry for human flesh. “Zan… Come in Zan,” buzzed the small radio implanted into Zan’s left ear. Crap! What does he want now? Thought Zan as he reached up to press a small button behind his ear.
“What do you want General? I am a little busy right now… getting shot at,” replied Zan as he held his hand on the small button. No response came for about two minutes and he just stood there crouching in one of the countless trenches on the huge battlefield.
“Zzzz…. Zzzz…. We need you and you company to fall back, I repeat fall back! Zzzz,” buzzed the small radio full of static.
“Why the hell are we retreating? We are driving those rebels back, we are winning!” said Zan almost yelling into the nearly invisible microphone built into his lip.
“Zzzz… That is an order!”
(more coming.)
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Post by Maliku on Oct 7, 2006 20:34:08 GMT -5
Interesting, a war story.
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Post by Khornate Marksman on Oct 7, 2006 21:40:47 GMT -5
This sounds awesome
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Post by Inquisitor Loki on Oct 7, 2006 21:45:36 GMT -5
Thanks.
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Post by DEATH97 on Oct 8, 2006 2:04:38 GMT -5
Awesome, and differen't from anything here so far, can't wait for more
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Post by Inquisitor Loki on Oct 8, 2006 8:12:02 GMT -5
Zan stood up from his crouched position and yelled out to his men, “We have orders to retreat, if any of you want to stay behind that is fine with me but I am not going to come back to bury you bullet ridden corpse. Now, MOVE OUT!”
“Why should we retreat? It practically 10 to 1 in favor of us,” said a crouched soldier to Zan’s right in a loud cocky voice that he recognized to a new recruit named Flarr.
“Hey, you should be glad. Those asses down at HQ are actually caring more about us than we are, now that’s a change I can live with,” said another crouched soldier that Zan knew as Shane.
“Okay enough fighting, we need to get down to business. This trench curves slightly in the direction of HQ so we should follow it as long as we can, so that we don’t get shot in the back while were running,” said Zan to the troops under his command.
“Sir, wouldn’t it be better if we went that way,” said Shane as he pointed toward the opposite side of the long trench.
“Now why would we do that? That way lead away from HQ.”
“Please here me out sir, if we go that way there is a large forest that eventually lead to the HQ. It may take longer but we would have cover the entire way and that means less of us get our asses blown off.”
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Post by DEATH97 on Oct 8, 2006 8:37:57 GMT -5
Its good, but he shouldn't talk to his commanding officer that way, he's going to get thrown into the brig, for sure if they get through this. Oh and you need to read my story, I know you said you haven't read much on here, but I give you permission to make my story the exception to that fact Aren't I nice?
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Post by Inquisitor Loki on Oct 8, 2006 10:15:28 GMT -5
“Sir, wouldn’t it be better if we went that way,” said Shane as he pointed toward the opposite side of the long trench.
“Now why would we do that? That way lead away from HQ.”
“Please here me out sir, if we go that way there is a large forest that eventually lead to the HQ. It may take longer but we would have cover the entire way and that means less of us get our asses blown off.”
Zan looked out at the barren white desert that they would have to cross with his plan and then looked at the dead patch of trees that offered precious cover. “Well once again Shane you have saved my ass and everyone else’s too. We will go towards the forest.”
“YES SIR”, said every soldier under his command, almost in unison.
It took a few minutes for Zan and his soldiers to pick up the various equipment that was scattered in the trench, which had been used as their home for the past five days. Once everyone was ready to leave they started the slow crouched march through the long and narrow trench with several bullet flying over head. No one talked during the long march, they were to lost in their thought and boredom.
It took about two painfully long hours to get to the end of the trech and the beginning of the forest. “Finally, I was starting to think that this trench was never going to end!,” yelled a soldier behind Zan.
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Post by Maliku on Oct 8, 2006 10:16:28 GMT -5
Haha, Death.
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Post by DEATH97 on Oct 8, 2006 18:05:46 GMT -5
Thats a looong trench!!
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Post by Inquisitor Loki on Oct 8, 2006 18:17:05 GMT -5
Yep, but you have to rember they were crouched while carying things that would slow them down a bit.
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Post by DEATH97 on Oct 12, 2006 8:43:07 GMT -5
Not many stories with guns yet.. I NEED MORE!!
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Post by Maliku on Oct 12, 2006 15:53:54 GMT -5
I want to see some blood shed.
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Post by Inquisitor Loki on Oct 12, 2006 17:47:57 GMT -5
I am probably going to only work on my WH40K story.
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Post by Dagothkitty on Oct 16, 2006 17:02:20 GMT -5
i think you may want to change the title. Kinda.....dull. i thought is was pretty good though.
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