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Post by alexiel on Sept 7, 2007 22:18:09 GMT -5
Like a caged bird Wings clipped No longer free to fly That's what you are like But you have always been inside the cage Not knowing what its like outside Watching others, from inside Seeing the birds as they go by Without a care And you feel no hope knowing that you have only one road to follow No choices for you, none at all And that's the difference between you and a caged bird Even a caged bird has its dream of flying Flying high in the sky without a care For you will never get rid of its dream to fly To be free For it still has hope To be set free And thats what you need To be set free
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Post by me on Sept 7, 2007 23:11:32 GMT -5
Another nice poem from you, though at some points it feels like your interrupting the flow. I can't really explain what I mean, its just that I am dragged out of it at key points.
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Post by lanaia74 on Sept 9, 2007 4:01:24 GMT -5
Superb! Bravo! Applauds!
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Post by Disaster <3 on Oct 22, 2007 20:34:07 GMT -5
I like it, but I have to agree with Me. There are some parts that just... kinda push me away. Otherwise, great job! Very nice point of view there.
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