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Post by Dagothkitty on Sept 25, 2006 18:51:42 GMT -5
Make way, for the dawn is breaking. None shall run, only harm to them will come. Oblivious glory is now certain and clear, for the resistors doom is almost near, The time grows nigh, and the hour late. But not even the wisest can escape there fate. The sky turns red, lightning, thunder, all will dread. Only one can save us from this doom, a champion, a hero, a savior. Call him by name, and throw him your flowers, as he rides magnificantly, down the cobble roads. Some question, "can he save us from this doom?" The answer will come, only in time, time is the essence. " Ride hero! Ride into battle!" save these people, bring them Hope, in this hour of darkness, for oblivion grows closer, the oblivion, of us all.... __________________________________________________
As you can see, this is a lot different, but it has the same idea. What do ya think? I like it more!
more will be added if you like it.
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Post by DEATH97 on Sept 25, 2006 19:09:40 GMT -5
Much better. I like this one alot actually.
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Post by Dagothkitty on Sept 25, 2006 19:11:35 GMT -5
Thanks! I'll add on then Not tonite though, i grow tired, and is goin to bed soon.
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Sept 25, 2006 20:05:50 GMT -5
wow yea thats much better you have a better flow in this poem and I must say I like the over all theme of it.
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VICTORBRAVO
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Post by VICTORBRAVO on Sept 26, 2006 15:24:20 GMT -5
I dont like poems, but yours is meh. (No offense, like I said, I HATE poems)
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Post by Dagothkitty on Sept 26, 2006 15:27:56 GMT -5
Uhhh, ok.
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Sept 26, 2006 16:01:58 GMT -5
Don't listen to Victor. Its a good poem
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Post by Dagothkitty on Sept 26, 2006 16:14:38 GMT -5
thanks
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Post by Dagothkitty on Sept 26, 2006 16:20:42 GMT -5
Make way, for the dawn is breaking, and a new era draws closer. None shall run, only harm to them will come. Bear the words of destruction, all will hear. Oblivious glory is now certain and clear, for the resistors doom is in the making, The time grows nigh, and the hour late. But not even the wisest can escape there fate. All shall unite, for this glorious fight, a fight to the last demon, or to last man, into the night. Make love to your wives, and say good bye to your youngling, for tommorow, we ride! The sky turns red, lightning, thunder, all will dread. Only one can save us from this doom, a champion, a hero, a savior. Lead us! Oh great hero! We will die with you, nothing less! Call him by name, and throw him your flowers, as he rides magnificantly, down the cobble streets. Some question, "can he save us from this doom?" The answer will come, only in time, time is the essence. " Ride hero! Ride into battle!" save these people, bring them Hope, in this hour of darkness, for oblivion grows closer, the oblivion, of us all.... ________________________________________________ Heres a little bit more.... hope ya like!
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Sept 26, 2006 16:24:10 GMT -5
Its very good. Keep up the good work.
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Post by Dagothkitty on Sept 26, 2006 16:26:06 GMT -5
Thanks again bloodmoon. Support is appreciated. Your working you way ro a promotion bud!
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Post by DEATH97 on Sept 26, 2006 16:29:57 GMT -5
Flattery will get you everywhere.. eh Dagoth?
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Post by Dagothkitty on Sept 26, 2006 16:32:11 GMT -5
maybe.
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Sept 26, 2006 16:33:04 GMT -5
;D Thanks. [glow=red,2,300][/glow]whoot I don't know what I did with the whole color crap. It will be interesting to see the outcome of this.
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Sept 26, 2006 16:33:38 GMT -5
aww nothing happened.
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