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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Sept 28, 2006 15:44:37 GMT -5
hey I'll write some more of this tonight. But right now I have a bit of a head/neck ache and don't feel like writing so ill just post comments and read some stories on this site OF GREATNESS XD
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Sept 30, 2006 12:59:06 GMT -5
[glow=red,2,300]Hey guys I'm definetly writing some more in like a bit. I'm just fleshing out the next part. Sorry I didn't write last night but to make it up to you....BAM ITS ALL GLOWY[/glow] ;D
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Sept 30, 2006 21:12:35 GMT -5
Ok here it is. some more of it.
As I walked by cheydenhal I tried to remember where the sactuary was. I knew there was a well near it but practically every house had a well near it. After much searching I finally spotted it from far away and began to sneak over to it from behind some houses. I finally got there and waited untill some one would come out.
By 1:00 am some one finally climbed up from the well. I noticed it was an argonian with Its Raiment on. I armed my bow and noticed there were no guards around so this was as perfect a time to kill him as I would get. I released my arrow and the shot struck. My aim was a little rusty but it managed to hit the assassin in the back of the head. My luck it killed him instantly. I approached the body and searched it. After a few moments I found a key to the sanctuary and a dagger that I took incase I might need it later.
Now came the hard part. I dragged the body behind a house and carefully descended the well. I had to hope most of them were asleep so I could make it down undetected. As I got to the end of the well I overheard some voices. One was a female breton and the other sounded like a male dark elf. "Well like I said after I killed that filthy orc I nailed his body onto the wall as a little present to his family hehehe" the breton said. "hmm very good you continue to surprise me you might be looking at a promotion soon" the dark elf said. " Why thank you very much. Its getting late tho I'm going to hit the hay good night" said the breton. "Yes I have a contract to take care of so I should probably leave good by" the dark elf said this. My heart started to pound as the dark elf approached the well. I didn't know what to do. He was too close for my bow to work without him making a sound and I couldn't take both of them on at once. Then I remembered the dagger and pulled it out. As I heard the door slam I ran out and gagged the dark elf. Then I plunged the dagger into his throat and watched as he slowly died in front of me. Now it was time for the breton to die. I began to devise a plan on how to kill her.
Yea thats all I'm writing tonight. hahahaha cliffhanger XD
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Post by DEATH97 on Oct 2, 2006 19:56:28 GMT -5
Sweet.. death...destruction.. lovin it.
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Oct 3, 2006 5:53:47 GMT -5
XD yay some one comented on it finally its been like a week whoot. XD
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Post by DEATH97 on Oct 3, 2006 11:41:52 GMT -5
Yeah, I think I figured out why that happens (nobody commenting) that little blue ball on the hompage turns blue if there is a new post on that board you havent read, but once you click on it there may be multiple post you haven't read, but if you read a single post.. the blue light goes off, and the user doesn't realize there is still new stuff he hasn't seen.
confuse ya?? hope not... wonder if loki can fix this??
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Oct 3, 2006 14:24:55 GMT -5
ohhhhh that sucks.
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Oct 4, 2006 13:51:30 GMT -5
Ok here is a little more. I have time so I think I will write a few enteries in all my stories if I can.
As I stood over the dead dunmer I began to devise my plan to kill the breton women. If I just ran in I would most likely wake her, and who ever else was there up. And I couldn't take them on by myself. But that also created another problem. If there were more people there then they would most likely wake from the sound of me killing one of them. At last I decided to just take my chances and sneak into the room. If any one was there I would try to kill them as silently as I could.
As I turned the nob and entered the room I noticed there were two people sleeping. There was the breton woman. She had long blond hair and had a great body. Her face was beautiful like a snowy mountain, and just as cold to. The other one was an orc. Not much to say about him. He was like every orc big and smelly. He wore steel armor instead of the standard assassin gear. I never understood why orcs became assassins. They are loud and they have no sense of subtlety. But whatever it wasn't my problem to explain the reasons behind what orcs do.
I walked over to the woman and drew out my dagger. I placed my hand near her mouth and placed my dagger over her heart. Then quickly I covered her mouth and thrusted my dagger into her heart. Blood squirted every where as she suddenly woke up. I could see fear in her eyes but that was quickly replaced by a nothingness that could only mean death. After a few minutes I assured myself that she was dead so I began to work on the orc.
I needed to keep him alive long enough to get the location of another sanctuary from him. So I grabbed some sheets from the other beds and began to tie them around his bed in a devil's tongue style not. I then commenced to tie his arms and legs to the sheets. I was lucky he was such a heavy sleeper or I wouldn't have been able to tie him up. Once I was done I began taking of his armor. To my relief he had clothes on under his armor. Now it was time to get some answers. I sheathed my dagger and punched the orc in the face.
He awoke instantly and tried but failed to escape from my little trap. He cursed and screamed but after a few minutes I grew tired of it so I took out my dagger and stabbed him in the thigh. He shut up and now I had my chance to get some answers from him.
Ok thats all for now let me know what you think.
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Post by dogonda on Oct 4, 2006 16:14:14 GMT -5
i likeit
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Oct 4, 2006 18:15:38 GMT -5
Ok I'm going to write a little bit more now.
"Awake? good because I want some answers and I want them now!" I said with a voice I've never heard myself use before "Now scum what will it be? will you tell were the other sanctuaries are? Or am I going to have to beat it out of you?" again in this strange voice. I was now getting angry but I couldn't tell why. My body and mind were working without me. My rage now controled my actions. I lost patience and smacked the orc in the face. He grunted in pain but didn't appear to be hurt that badly. "You'll never get anything from me you filth." the orc said with a bit of a smirk on him. This was the last straw. I couldn't controle my self any longer. I took my dagger and shoved it right into his shin."NOW TELL ME YOU SCUM!" I was shouting now but I couldn't stop. I began to peel off parts of his skin as I watched him squirm and scream out in pain. He pleaded for me to stop but I couldn't. I tried but nothing happened I just kept carving and ripping at his skin with my dagger. Blood pouring from his leg."Ok ok I'll tell you just please stop it" the orc cried out. But I couldn't stop I moved onto his other leg and started the whole thing over again."PLEASE STOP AAGGGHHH!"the orc shouted tears now coming from his eyes and vomit coming from his mouth. I finally came to my senses."Fine talk you scum where are the other sactuaries?" I said more calmly now."There is one in Bravil in an abandoned house near the statue of the lucky old lady." He said fearfully. "Thats all I know I swear"the orc said again fearfully. "Ok orc and tell me I killed the argonian,the breton, and the dark elf, but is there any one else here besides you?" I said now getting excited again. "No, no there was only us now please just leave me alone." the orc said in his quivering voice. "HAHAHA YOU THINK I'LL LET YOU LIVE YOU SCUM? TELL ME WHY WOULD I DO THAT? WHAT GOOD CAN I POSSIBLY GET FROM KEEPING YOU ALIVE? NO, I THINK IT WILL BE MORE FUN TO KILL YOU." I said in my strange voice. I feared I was losing controle again. The orc was about to say something but I shoved my dagger into his heart before he could speak. Blood squirted from his mouth and he quickly died with a look of horror in his face. The thing that scared me the most was that it felt good. I was changing and I feared I couldn't controle it. I left the sanctuary not bothering to loot it. I didn't care about money at this point and I had all the arrows I needed at the time. So I left the sanctuary bloody but it was still night time and no one was around to notice me. I left thru the main gate and began my journey towards Bravil.
Ok guys what do you think?
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Post by dogonda on Oct 4, 2006 18:27:29 GMT -5
I like your style, 1st person isnt used alot and I was toying around with the idea, but you pull it off well.
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Oct 4, 2006 18:29:45 GMT -5
thanks bud. Any suggestions on how to make my story better or is it fine the way it is?
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Post by Maliku on Oct 5, 2006 14:46:29 GMT -5
Well, I finally got around to reading this. I loved it, nice and bloody.
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Post by DEATH97 on Oct 5, 2006 14:52:40 GMT -5
I read read this yesterday.. thought I commented, but I guess I got distracted. Its good stuff, I love anything that remotely involves the brotherhood.. you'll be seeing them pop up in my story soon.
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Post by dogonda on Oct 8, 2006 1:01:07 GMT -5
While good, always remember that each time a different person speeks its a new paragraph. Also, I would have thought that sheets would tear under his strength. Also, it seemed you had forgotten about the sheets in your part. If you stabbed him, the sheets would soak up the blood.
Also, im not sure what race he is, nor if he is a Assasin, Mage, or warrior.
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