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Post by dogonda on Oct 10, 2006 20:09:38 GMT -5
both of us can
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Oct 10, 2006 20:10:03 GMT -5
yaaaaaay. I'll send you a pm dagonda and just tell me what you think. I'm not done with this section so it will be a bit cliffhangery...if thats a word lol. but yea I'll send it now. Thanks I appreciate this.
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Oct 10, 2006 20:10:31 GMT -5
ok I'll send it to both. Thanks guys.
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Post by dogonda on Oct 10, 2006 20:10:49 GMT -5
anytime, you inspired my story.
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Oct 10, 2006 20:13:10 GMT -5
XD. ok I sent both of you guys a PM. Thanks so much. If you guys ever need me to proof read I'll be there. XD
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Oct 11, 2006 16:16:39 GMT -5
hey I will be posting the next part soon. I'm just getting it proof read and stuff. It will be long tho. I'm just warning you. In word perfect it was like two pages. So in a bit I'll have it there.
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Oct 11, 2006 16:41:27 GMT -5
As I walked by the trees and bushes I noticed I had ran out of supplies. It had been a week since I left Cheydenhal and I had enough food and water to last a day or two more. I decided to look for sustenance. After all If I died I couldn’t complete my task. The only thing I wanted to do.
After awhile of searching I spotted a deer and the horizon. I took out my bow and drew my arrow back. I released my arrow and followed with my eyes as the arrow met it target. I thanked the nine and ran to my kill. Cutting it up I went on my way. Now looking for water. I eventually found some in a pond. Excited I ran to it and gazed upon my reflection. A new face looked up at me. In the last two or three weeks my black hair had become unkempt and long. I was now growing a small beard. My eyes seemed dull and dead and I had bags under them. There was blood staining my clothes and now that I looked at myself I began to realize I would have to be more careful. After all I look so suspicious I could be stopped at anytime. And these fools wouldn’t understand what I was doing.
Eventually I snapped back into reality and thirst took me. I dipped my hands into the water and drank up. My reflection disappeared as the water began to ripple. Little swirls everywhere that eventually started to subside as I noticed my face return to the pond. But my heart sank as I notice another reflection as well as mine.
“Well, well, well it looks like I finally found you eh Night Fang?” The stranger said in a rather amused voice that dug into my skin. “Or I should say Romulus now eh?” “That is you name isn’t it?” The man said in his same tone of voice. I began to turn around and noticed the man clearly for the first time. He like my self was an imperial. He had short brown hair and black eyes that seemed to pierce thru me. He was a bit taller than me and was a little more muscular than myself. Now I noticed his face began to turn into a more serious tone. “Did you think you could leave the Dark Brotherhood so easily?” “You should know we don’t stand traitors in our family.” the imperial said with a new and far more scary tone. “But I suppose you have been a bit of help haven’t you?”
“How so?” I said quizzically now a bit confused as to what he was talking about
“Hmm, Romulus I did think better of you. Did you think we couldn’t have just killed you as we pleased? We are the Dark Brotherhood after all. No we decided to let you live. Blinded by your rage we knew you would seek revenge against us and that’s what we wanted.” Said the imperial
“What the hell are you talking about?” Now starting to get angry.
“Ok let me explain it to you. It’s the least I can do before I kill you any way. Well you see we recently learned that there was a traitor in the Cheydenhal sanctuary. But we didn’t know who. As if that wasn’t enough we couldn’t trust any body there. No one assassin had a clean cut alibi so we resorted to the act of purification as a means of this problem. At around this time we found out where you were hiding. So we kidnaped your wife killed her and placed her at your house. Knowing you would want nothing but revenge we let you live. And finally you killed the Cheydenhal assassins for us. You see Romulus you were just a tool used by the very thing you hate. We were very pleased to get this chance to ruin you life before we finally killed you. Let this be a final lesson to you. Don’t go against the Dark Brotherhood.” By the end of the assassin’s speech I was barely able to restrain myself from attacking him.
“So, I was just a tool? Nothing more than a little pawn in your stupid game.” I was angry now. My voice began to tremble with this fury inside of me. It reminded me of when I killed the orc. My voice starting to change again. “I’ll kill you, then I’ll kill the rest of you scum. You killed my wife you destroyed my life. I can never forgive you for this. I will kill every last one of you.” Now anger getting the best of me I lunged at him.
Dagger in hand I swung at him blindly. Startled by this he jumped back and hit his back on a tree. Swinging continuously I finally met his shoulder with the dagger. He screamed out but had enough foresight to dodge as I slashed him. Pulling a dagger of his own he plunged his dagger into my ribs. Blood spilling out I screamed. My vision blurred by the pain I began to stumble back.
“Ha, ha, ha you fool did you think you could beat me? Did you think you could succeed in you little quest. You may have killed the Cheydenhal fools but the others will expect you. You going to die and there is nothing you can do about it.” The assassin said.
“DIE BASTARD!” I shouted now no longer having any control of my body. I sliced at his instead and met him in the ribs. Angry at this he knocked me down with one kick to the stomach. I fell down but as I reached the ground I plunged the dagger in the back of his knee. He buckled down and I quickly got to my feet and kicked him in the face. Blood now dripping from his nose he fell to the ground. I pulled my dagger from his leg. Now punching him in the face continuously I slashed at his chest and began to laugh. I couldn’t stop my self even after he was dead. I remember his last words were a quiet whisper. “You fool”. I continued to slash at him laughing and shouting. His organs showing and his bones visible there was blood every where. But still I laughed and laughed. I couldn’t stop fearing that I finally lost my mind. A good half hour past and I came to my senses. I went to my knees and looked at the former human on the ground. Now mostly a mesh of blood and flesh. His face however stared up at me and I began to vomit. Uncontrollably I threw up and collapsed to the ground and lost consciousness.
ok what do you guys think?
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Post by GreyEidolon on Oct 11, 2006 16:47:32 GMT -5
Definite improvement, forgot to mention that in the PM. Write more soon, as I am Writing more of "WSGS". Wahoo.
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Post by Maliku on Oct 11, 2006 17:00:47 GMT -5
You forgot to capitalize Night Fang.
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Oct 11, 2006 19:40:47 GMT -5
ahwell I do it now. But what did yall(damn I said yall =_=) think of it?
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Oct 11, 2006 19:56:48 GMT -5
FINE I'LL READ YOU STOR
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Post by Maliku on Oct 11, 2006 19:57:43 GMT -5
It's good, I will be waiting for the update.
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Oct 11, 2006 20:16:58 GMT -5
yea I'll probably write more tomorrow. My hand hurts and I'm tired. lol I love to complain XD. But yea I haven't even thought of the next part so it may take a day or two. All I know is he wakes up (obviously) and random crap that you can tell will happen. Then I'll make him arrive at Bravil.
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Post by DEATH97 on Oct 12, 2006 6:32:56 GMT -5
Its great bloodmoon. Yeah it definitely sounds like he's lost his mind. I feel bad for whoever tries to cross his path next.
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Post by BloodMoonWolf on Oct 12, 2006 13:17:02 GMT -5
XD. yea people posting comments about my story. whooooooooooot
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